This 100-word story is Part 2 of a story I wrote for the VisDare writing prompt. If you haven’t read Part 1 of The Accident, you can read it here:
Part 2 stands alone, but trust me when I say it’s much better with its counterpart, so please go read it first. When I saw the Friday Fictioneers photo prompt, I knew this had to be a continuation.
The Accident, Part 2: Everglades
The police presence briefly spoils the Everglades’ natural beauty, but in the face of death, nature lives on. Alligator eyes watch. A heron perches nearby. Detectives Stuart Leale and Henri Archer linger over the man’s body, speculating.
“Looks like the work of the Everglades Butcher,” Detective Archer says. “No I.D. without the fingers or teeth.”
Detective Leale squats beside the man, attempting to regain his composure. Furious, he says, “Trust me. This is a copycat.” He nervously scans the boardwalk, troubled by the fact that the woman’s body he dumped here last night is gone, replaced with her husband’s.
You can read the other Friday Fictioneers stories here:
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Part 3 PLEASE!!!!
That’s all creativity I have in me for today. I’ll have to think about Part 3. 😀
I agree this stands alone, but it is so much richer when you know more about the background. This could be the start of a novel centered around Stuart told in 100 word sections!? I’d love to read it.
Thanks, Karen!
Works well on its own. Which is good. 🙂
Thanks, Sandra!
Ooh, yummy stuff!
Thank you! 🙂
i checked out part 1 but this definitely works as a standalone as well. fantastic twist.
Thanks, K.Z.!
As older daughter once said, “I never had a problem like that before!” 🙂
janet
I sure hope not! Thanks, Janet!
Now that was a “Dexter” moment.
Scott
Thanks, Scott! I’ve never watched Dexter, but maybe I should.
Yes, I am on the last season and have enjoyed it immensely. I love listening to the thoughts of a sociopath, someone truly without regret, emotions, etc… so different from us. Watch it from the beginning.
Write on, dear Lisa. Very entertaining!
Love you!
Candy and David
Thanks, Candy and David! Love you both! 🙂
I read both…the swapped bodies was a great touch! Like the animal “scenery” too
Thanks so much!
Wonderful! Love the sharp 90 in the story!
Regards
Jim
Thank you, Jim!
Dear Lisa,
A nice little cliff-hanger here.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle!
Great! I would drop the last “body” from that sentence though. Love the continuing story!
Thanks for visiting and commenting. You’re right about the last “body.” I deleted it. I thought about removing it after I wrote the story and somehow it got pushed to the back of my mind. 🙂
Nice on its own, but yes– as a continuation this is chilling! That Stuart is a creeeepy guy! Nice job, Lisa!
Thanks so much! 🙂
Oh dear Lisa what goes on here. Lovely little twist at the end.
Thanks so much! I have no idea what goes on here. It surprises me too.
Creepy wonderful and creepy want more! Thanks! Nan
Thank you, Nan!
Wonderful. Such a twist.
Thanks, Patrick!
I’m glad I’d read Part 1, Lisa. I agree that we need a Part 3 and perhaps more. This was well written and would make a great short story, or perhaps a contribution to a longer book.
Thanks, Patricia!
You are developing a very interesting character Lisa.
Thanks, Dawn!
Great twist at the end. Also, I love the description of the wildlife watching …
Thanks, Siobhan!
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